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Thursday, May 17, 2007

Hey Rachel!

First and foremost, it's an interesting read! For both essays, you manage to address the question and you sustaniate your points. Plus, it's not too formal too turn off the reader from reading.

For the prejudice article,

Good points:
- interesting and relevant example =)
- good sentence structure, signposting it's easy to follow your clear path of thoughts

Areas to improve on
- just a minor thing it's " at no time" not "at not time" x_x
- the second paragraph becomes slightly irrelevant as you didn't link it back to the question clearly.

That's all =) I look forward to your furure aticles!


8:30 PM